A novel milestone

My writing critique group finally finished this week my first Donne & Donne novel, Gunsmoke & Jasmine, which I started in NaNoWriMo in 2010 (!). I’ve received enough comments (good and informative ones) to realize that the whole thing needs a massive rewrite (they also had numerous comments over time, including tonight, about what the next book(s) should focus on, which is mildly awkward given that I’ve actually already written the next book, too).

I’ll … be putting that all aside for a while, but it was quite a milestone, and I wanted to make note of it here.

NaNoWriMo VICTORY!

Home from the last Write-In, and both +Kay Hill registered victories for National Novel Writing Month, both topping 50K.

This was Kay's first year not in the Young Writers Program, and targeting 50K, and she cruised to victory after a few bumpy gaps (carrying a very full course load and joining the Diving team didn't help).

A combination of doing an "edit" year (time=words), and being unemployed, meant that I was able to keep the steadiest curve of any NaNo I've ever done. It was still a grind, but I also felt like was able to get some really good revision work done (some of which included chopping out stuff that needed chopping, other parts of which included writing some new material that needed writing).

So, success!

Many kudo-thanks, as always, to +Margie Kleerup, who continuously supported us in all of our writing efforts.

The weird thing is anticipating next year. +Kay Hill and I have been doing NaNo since 2009. (I also did 2001 and 2002.) She's helped keep me honest ("role model!"), which has been both useful and fun.

Next year, though … she'll be off to college. She currently plans to NaNo there (and I assume it's A Thing at colleges), but even though we'll be writing buddies, it just won't be quite the same. (Sniffles, and cue "Sunrise, Sunset.")

But that's next year. This year? VICTORY! And we can both do the proud Hero Walk into the credits.

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Things are going well with NaNoWriMo. TOO well with NaNoWriMo

My word-count / time-count is going remarkably smoothly. Doing an editing job and being unemployed is helpful (in this limited context). But, more importantly, I've Figured Something Else.

I had reached the point of original story that hasn't gone through any writing group work, so it's all pretty rough and dismayingly first-drafty. And I had suggestions from my writing group on the material up to that point that, if followed, would have led to basically rewriting the whole rest of the book.

Which sometimes is the right thing to do, absolutely. And their suggestion would work, but …

… I've figured out how to avoid that. And I confirmed that by reading through the rest of my novel, which I probably haven't done in four or five years. And while I put some very snarky comments in the margins (which makes me feel a bit better about putting snarky comments in the margins of people in my writing group), overall I enjoyed what I wrote a lot. I even chuckled several times.

That said, I have one scene coming up that needs to made much more useful (actually adding to the narrative), and another that needs to be essentially rewritten from the bedrock (and to set up some cascading consequences in the succeeding chapters). But those are very doable, discrete things. I have plenty to do, believe me. But I have goals, and ideas, and things to do, and plenty of additional writing to do within all that.

I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop, but so far, so good.

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A NaNoWriMo update

Word count continues to be maintained [1], and I even got up early yesterday to get some writing in before a very busy day.

Although this is a revision / editing cycle NaNo, I'm actually surprised to find how much new writing I am adding in — scenes that folk suggested needed to be shown-not-told, blocks of dialog to change (for the better, I hope) the emotional tone of some of the scenes. It makes me feel a bit better about my effort his year. I'm taking some stuff out, too, but the net word count will almost certainly be going up.

This week things start to hit their stride, with multiple write-ins on the calendar. I'm actually still feeling excited about the month, rather than, "Oh, crap, it's morning and i'm another 1,667 words in the hole." I know that excitement won't last, but I'll enjoy it while I can.

#NaNoWriMo

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[1] Yes, I realize that the more I say that, the greater the likelihood I will be hit by a bus, or ennui, and fall desperately behind. Which is how my NaNos usually go.

 

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Yes, it’s NaNoWriMo time again!

November means National Novel Writing Month, so I'm starting to gear up for that effort — 50,000 words in 30 days (with a holiday thrown in toward the end just to keep things interesting), or 1,667 words a day.

I think that this year I'm going to go the NaNoEdMo route again and do more edit work on the novel I'm most complete on and have been working on in a writing group, Gunsmoke & Jasmine. The pitch:

If a pair of supernatural detectives in 1952 San Francisco can't find the murderer of minor deity in a seedy bar, it might mean the end of their marriage — and the end of the world! It's up to hedge magician Roger Donne and his dragon-raised Chinese wife, Chrys, to unravel a plot that may lead to the Red Chinese getting the Mandate of Heaven, and triggering World War 3!

Sort of The Thin Man meets Catch a Deadly Spell, with a soupcon of Big Trouble in Little China.

If I finish that needed pass of editing the second half of the novel, then I'll dive into writing what I realize now will be the second book in the series (having already written the second book during an earlir pair of NaNos that will become the third book).

As in past NaNoEdMo, I convert my usual writing speed into time — I can do 1667 words in 90 minutes (based on past NaNo experience), so that's my daily target. It's a bit of a cheat, but the goal of the month is to focus on the writing experience, and this is something I need to focus on.

This will be the eleventh year I've done this exercise. It never gets easier, but it's always a creative blast.

Anyone else out there doing the NaNo thing this year?

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Prompt: The First Time I Was Frightened By My Own Actions

I have instructions from where the bus left me off on how to get to the inexpensive hotel that has been recommended to me. It is late, and the air is chill with the fog that is rolling into the city.

It is not how I pictured America, but I am free.

I hear steps behind me as I walk the dark streets. I am on guard, a thousand dangers haunting me, though I do not look back. I force calm upon myself, consider the three colors of the Autumn Gate, the five sounds of the Falls of Silver Joy, and the nine paths to obedient virtue.

Those last are always the hardest, which makes them the best calming discipline.

A hand grabs my upper right arm, a voice grunts out something unintelligile, vile in tone, unmistakable in threat.

I let the pull swing me around, add to the movement, bring the arm clenched to my left side explode forward, propelled by my left hip, driving the fingers straight and rigid into the throat of the man who grabbed me.

A crunch of cartilage, and the man is staggering back, clutching his neck, eyes bulging, trying to breath past the smashed windpipe, the welling of blood. He trips, goes down hard to the sidewalk, still noiseless, staring at me, staring at the sky, scrabbling on the ground beside him.

His eyes roll upward, his body spasms, still without breath.

He passes out. He will be dead in a minute or two.

I stare down at him. I have fought a thousand, ten thousand practice bouts in the Courts. I have been taught by great warriors, by subtle assassins, by creatures of beauty and creatures of horror. The dragons gave me strength and speed, and the training to kill with a touch.

I have never killed a human before.

I stare down at him a moment longer. Then, as silent as he, I turn and run for the hotel, as the demons of Diyu pursued me, though I am never able to escape that moment again.

Prompt

Prompt: “Arriving for Dinner on the Wrong Night”

The flowers weren’t much, but they smelled nice. I wasn’t much either, but ditto. I took a deep breath, prayed to the ancient god of Guys Out on Dates, and knocked on the door.

After a few moments, it slowly opened. Chrys wasn’t standing there. Instead, it was a very tall, very severe Chinese woman, dressed in some sort of outlandish Oriental outfit. She looked down at me, in silence. Even through all that makeup pancaked on her face, her disdain for me was palpable.

My flowers might have wilted a little bit.

“I–” I stopped, cleared my through. “Mr. Roger Donne, calling on Miss Chrysanthemum Long.”

The figure continued to stare down at me. I might have been daunted, if I weren’t a doughty war vet. Okay, I was a vet, and I was still daunted.

“Um–we, I mean she, and I, we had dinner engagements. She was–” Is it hot in here, or just me? “She invited me to partake, that is, to dine. Here. With her. On–”

“Wednesday night,” Chrys chimed in, peering around the silent figure. She was in a simple smock and a worried expression. “It was for tomorrow night, Roger.”

“Tomorrow–” I counted on my fingers in my head. “This is, wait, this is Tuesday night?”

“Yes.”

Being a detective sometimes meant nights, and days, and dates all blurred. I realized she was correct. “Well, son–of a gun. I’m here on the wrong night.”

“Sorry,” Chrys said.

“Well, I apologize–” I bobbed a little bit at Chrys, a little bit at the silent, glowering woman. “Apologize, for–”

“SHE IS OTHERWISE ENGAGED.” The woman’s voice boomed at me, though with an odd lack of echo in the small apartment corridor.

“This is my Aunt–” Chrys began, then the door slammed. I’m not sure which of them did it.

I listed at the door for a moment, hearing nothing, then stepped, slowly, quietly, away.

I shivered for some reason, and looked down at the flowers. “I need a drink,” I told them. They agreed by not saying anything in disagreement, and I headed for Buttons. Maybe the waitress would like the flowers.


Prompt

Prompt: “Through the Wrong Door”

I rounded into the hallways in time to see DeMarco closing the door behind him at its far end. I didn’t think there was a fire escape at the other end of the building, but I couldn’t take the chance of him getting away, not after what he’d done, not after he’d been so close.

I slipped up beside the door, out of line of easy fire through it. The .45 in my hand was heavy and cool. I carefully reached over with my left and slowly twisted the knob. Unlocked.

A few deep breaths. Breaking into a room where someone might be shooting back at you had never been one of my favorite pastimes during the war. Being armed with only a pistol, even this pistol, didn’t make it any more entertaining.

And exhale. And turn and push and roll to the far side of the doorway to avoid the first shots–

–which didn’t come, but–

Roaring of wind, and something else, the stink of sulfur, a cloud of ash blowing into the corridor — “Donne! Donne, help me! For the love of God!”

I only intended a quick peep around the door jamb, but what I saw caught me, and I stared, a big target to anyone who wanted to shoot, except that nobody there did.

I wasn’t looking at an apartment like I’d expected, sofas and chairs and end tables and all that jazz. Instead, I was looking onto a vast landscape, earth dark and ashen, pocked by pits from which flame and smoke arose, a horizon of flicking red on black, the sky overhead vast and dark and starless.

And there was DeMarco, being dragged off backwards by two hulking figures, easily ten feet tall, mottled gray and scaled and horned. They stopped, and one turned and looked at me, eye sockets and grinning mouth aflame.

“Donne! You gotta help me!” DeMarco was babbling, screaming, begging. “Those things, those murders, yeah, I did them. You gotta help me, save me out of here, turn me in, I’ll confess, I’ll do the time, just, for Christ’s sake, Donne, help me!”

The demon looking back at me cocked its head.

I thought about demons I’d wranged with during the war, and why. And I thought about Jimmy DeMarco, and what he’d done to those girls.

The air was choking and foul, and I had to cough for a moment, before I said, “He’s all yours, gentlemen.”

“Donne! No! In God’s name, Donne! No!” Tears were running down his widened eyes.

“Bye, Jimmy,” I said, and closed the door.

I stared at the dimly lit hallway a long time until the last flakes of ash settled to the ground.

When I opened the door again, it was an apartment.

Nobody ever found Jimmy DeMarco. I didn’t offer the police any suggestions as to where to find him.


Prompt

Prompt: “The Things He Needed to Burn”

I stood and watched a while as Augie looked at the wooden crate full of rolled parchment that he had carried out with him. Behind us, the sound of the burning cathedral, now mostly just guttering flames amidst hot, charred ruins, snapped and hissed. I didn’t think any of the Krauts had made it out alive from the undercroft, but I still had the Thompson out and ready.

Of Marie, there was no sign.

After a few, long minutes, Augie turned and stepped back to the edge of the ruined structure. A large wooden beam, maybe 10×10, sprawled amidst some blackened stone. The wood was deeply charred, but a sheltered spot still glowed a fiery charcoal red.

Augie set the box down. He took the first scroll out, looked at it a long moment longer, then crouched and laid it against the embers. He blew lightly on it, and, after a moment, it caught. The parchment was stubborn, but flame slowly engulfed it.

He reached into the box, and placed another scroll on the first.

“So, nothing there of any use?” I asked. The heat from the building, even with the fire died mostly down, was incredible, and sweat was rolling off my face.

“On the contrary,” Augie said, his cultured Limey accent crisp and cool even in the heat. “Herr Geisterbeschwörer’s collection is … remarkable. Some of these scrolls date back to the High Middle Ages. Some are transcripts of older texts going back to the time of the Greeks, the Egyptians, the Persians.”

“That old, huh?”

“Yes, that old.” His voice grew distant, soft. He stared at the flames. “The most incredible necromantic collection I’ve ever seen. With study and the correct conditions, the spells in these scrolls could destroy the world. The owner of this knowledge, should he be ruthless and mad enough, could raise the dead, everywhere, control their spirits, and conquer mankind in days. He could transform this planet into a hellscape of death energy, feeding upon the living to extend his control of the risen to the ends of the Earth — or even beyond.”

“Jesus,” I said.

He put another scroll onto the small fire he’d built. I thought I head a faint scream over the crackle of flames as it began burning, and I shivered.

“So,” I said at last. “You’re making sure nobody else ever has a chance to use them.”

Augie snorted. “Oh, dear Roger, that’s not my concern.” He looked up at me, eyes dark and not quite human. “I’m making sure that I never use them.”

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Prompt

Prompt: “Why She Walked Away”

I turned my back on him. It was hard — so very hard. Every muscle resisted. I was swimming through honey, just to turn, and to begin to step forward was —

“IF YOU GO,” he said, his voice even louder than it had been before, buffeting me from all sides, “YOU WILL NOT BE ALLOWED TO RETURN.”

A step. My left foot upon the floor, the tile smooth and cool against my flesh.

My right foot —

“IF YOU GO,” he said again, “YOU WILL HAVE OUR WRATH, AND NOT EVEN THE PROTECTION OF THE DRAGONS WILL SAVE YOU.”

— touched the floor. No sweat in that chill chamber, no slipperiness. My sole gripped the tile, pulling me forward, still with painful slowness, but slightly faster.

“IF YOU GO,” he said, one last time, and the voice shuddered through my flesh, “ALL THAT WE HAVE PLANNED FOR YOU, ALL THAT WE HAVE PREPARED FOR YOU, YOUR VERY PURPOSE AMONG US, WILL BE THROWN AWAY.”

I dared not stop. If I lost my momentum, I might never gain it again. But my lips could move as my left foot pulled me to where my right foot could pull me to where —

“And that,” I said, my own voice little more than a whisper,” is why I go.”


Prompt – “Write about Why She Walked Away